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what is your hell?
is it waking up lost and alone each day
on a path to nowhere fast,
incapable of finding your way?

do you feel the temptation
to just hide away again,
to go back to bed and refuse to face
the places your heart has been?

do you hate to face each morning
with despair already filling you?
why not simply sleep forever,
hasn't life already come unglued?

what's left here for you,
when life's already hell?
haven't you already been abandoned
by those you love so well?

there's nothing left here for you
and there's no one left who cares.
you have the choice to not wake up again,
the question is if you dare...

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hey, this thing needs a title and some help in general. ideas?

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  • mjm1495
    May 30
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    This was a great poem and for the title I think it should be If you dare. idk but it was good


  • Antebellum
    May 28

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    "there's nothing left here for you
    and there's no one left who cares.
    you have the choice to not wake up again,
    the question is if you dare..."

     

     

    amazing stanza. i really like the rhyme you have going here. awesome write.