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relationships

In your life you receive gifts, and you never really notice them much until you relize that there gone.

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this was my first poem i've ever written.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    May 16
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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    The message that this write has is very true I really like the way that it is expressed, although it does make me wonder if there is anything else that you want to express here? Maybe adding some personal detail would be an idea for the future - but that is just my opinion I like this!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    May 16

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    welcome to all poetry

    You are very right, it's easy to take something for granted until you realize you don't have it anymore.

    ♥
    Shawna
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