Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Because of you

Battered and broken,
I remember every word spoken.
My heart and trust you shattered,
Pieces of me, and who i use to be still scattered.

Will I ever trust again?
He's True to me but still I wonder
It's all because of you, it's all because of you.
If you could look me in the eyes, and lie back then.
So could any other,  Some one could do it again.
I can't help but wonder.

He try's so hard to win my trust,
So did you, but then you  turned it to dust.
Now that you're  back in my life, I want you to know,
If you even try to break what we have,
Just imagine the punches he will throw.

Will I ever trust again?
He's True to me but still I wonder
It's all because of you, it's all because of you.
If you could look me in the eyes, and lie back then.
So could any other,  Some one could do it again.
I can't help but wonder.

It's all because of you
And all the hell you put me through






Author notes

..... Option 1

A contest entry

what do you think?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 9 of 9

  • amaranthine lover gold member
    August 25
    Edit | Reply

    16.94 / 25

    Very strong and raw.


  • Griswold silver member
    August 3

    Edit | Reply
    A fine set of lyrics dear niece of mine. Trust is something easily broken and oh so hard to repair. This fact I know from experience. Thank you for taking the time to enter the "Fight for the Gold" contest it is appreciated, best of luck to you in the judging... Scott


  • Antebellum
    July 20

    Edit | Reply
    I can relate very well to this.
    wonderful rhyming [like always]

    thanks for entering,
    good luck.


  • nobodys-girl
    June 29

    Edit | Reply
    wow... so many jerks out there who ruin our trust... great poem. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • Ken-Maverick
    May 28

    Edit | Reply

    JUDGED!!

    What wonderfully penned lyrics, well done poet
    Thanks for entering and all the best to you in the contest.

    Ken


  • XXLetMeBleedxX
    May 20
    Edit | Reply

    awsome

    hey wow nice poems


  • xochocoholicxo
    May 19
    Edit | Reply
    don't revise its perfect


  • xochocoholicxo
    May 19
    Edit | Reply
    very genuine emotion
    thanx 4 entering good luck

  • xXx Dark Poet xXx
    May 19

    Edit | Reply
    i dont think u need to change it. i think its good. i have trust issues also. my (ex) bf dumped me because i would never tell him what was going on and everything.

1 - 9 of 9