her tongue
was an island of dead
flower buds
where thoughts were turned
to movement
and vibrations that upset
the sickly tasting sea
sank into hollowness
Author notes
inspired by the image from the contest.
In a list
A contest entry
- Abstract Poetry #38 - Initiation Of Hours - by The Cube.
500 points, ended May 23, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow.. thats amazing. I have to tell you this was a real treat.. I just wanted to randomly comment on someones work and you got picked.. I think this is great and I'm glad I picked you.
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I love the first three lines...god ive said it once ill say it again your stuff is awesomely profound.
I love your works they are so inspiring.
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if you have a choice ... lose the picture, let your words stand strong by themselves (i know, some contests almost force you into drawing the reader's eye into a picture instead of your words)
this is impressive ...
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Yes actually, now since the contest has finished, I have removed the image from the piece.
Thanks for that suggestion.
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much stronger piece without it
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Wonderful unique imagery.
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Beautiful Eyes, I don't believe I have ever seen or heard something of extreme pleasure expressed this way. Great write.
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awesome
deep, and meaningful, yet bissfully short. Oh and i personally think te eatng disorder fits best. Particularly with the first few lines.
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I like this write. It seemed to flow nicely with a hint of poison within it.
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you are creative and unique. i see this as someone who is sickened by the taste of what society is handing them... becoming frail by lack of ambition and in turn, hollow and depressed.
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I love this, your abstract poetry is something to be reckoned with, I was going to enter this but no way now. Perfect. Best to you in the contest
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yes, yes, yes!
I am becoming a big fan of your poetry...which
gives me an idea!
you are a fearless writer..you allow your ink
to spill....and boldly too!
ears/SEattle
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wow. this is beautiful.
I love the first stanza. the imagery is stunning.
and the ending is pretty amazing as well
goodluck in the contest <3
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