watermelon

rhythm and blinks

became the deepest
                 shades of ruby
and melted to
    fresh watermelon juice
           with the swing of hips

she moved

as if wildflowers
would grow over musical notes
and silence her passion

if her heels stopped
clicking...

Author notes

Original piece entered into contest was:

"rhythm

became deep shades of ruby
and fresh watermelon juice

when she blinked"

prompt: 13 words exactly on "diva" in ten mins

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after contest I edited and added.

image credit

In a list

Poetry beginning with W • next in list

A contest entry

Saturday Morning Quickie 5 poets, 10 minutes, 13 words by islekine. 460 points, ended May 16, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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invisible heart
June 10
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beautiful piece uv written
The Drifter
June 3

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Beautiful Eyes, please stop, do not just pass on by.
Prompts thoughts by stirring visual and auditory senses.
white stone
May 18

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I read this three times trying to make it a little less sexy in my mind.

I failed.

You write the most mouth watering subtle surrealism...
Rubies becoming watermelon juice is definitely an image I consider a gift you gave to my mind. I'll play that back numerous times, I'm sure.

So full of vibrant life in the form of a musical, determined heart.
Well written.
Aussie Gypsy
May 16

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This is so beautifully done, you captures so much emotion and some fortmatting gobbledegook in the middle as well (hmmm might want to fix that lol) well done. Best to you in the contest
ears2hearyou
May 16

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oh..my goodness....this is far more worthy than
simple honorable....

you played with the imagery in textures as if
you were playing an instrument!

natural poet talent in you!
Keep up the great writing!
ears/Seattle
I loved this poem!
wow!
Tatiana Thaele
May 16
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I find the image of fresh watermellon juice so vivid and odly mouth watering. Very effective!!!
Emmyb
May 16
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definitely unique. nice one.
islekine
May 16

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Most unique take yet!
Thanks for entering!
Best wishes always!
Write on and on!
penman
May 16
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Excellent
Such a terrific take on the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
whispernthedark
May 16

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Wow, I love the use of color in this piece. Very melodramatic. Great take

♥
whisper
etoile
May 16

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this is so cool!
I love the imagery and everything about this.
brilliantly said in so few words.
goodluck with this!
<3