You said you loved me,
said you cared,
I believed you
and you abused my emotions
You told me you wanted to be with me,
told me everything I wanted to hear.
The day it happened,
the day I cut myself,
You said that you had no one
but certain people....
I was not one of those people.
You said that I was your best friend
and you abandoned me when I needed you the most
Many people thought I deserved better than you
The only thing that they didn't know..
You have my heart.
I have been thru thick and thin,
and the one time I needed you the most,
you weren't there for me.
A few days before, we got in a fight
because you don't want me to get a tattoo.
You told me about Brooke getting one and where it was
you both said it hurt, but I didn't listen to you.
I only wanted one and then you tell me I won't sit thru it,
I wanted one to make me happy and I made the mistake,
The mistake of telling her no one wanted to see me happy
and they get what they want...
You don't care what happens to me..
You only care what other people think..
That is one of the things that hurts..
She told me all you want is me too be happy
but you know, they all know
i won't be happy with you.
Why do you think that?
I felt like nobody before I met you...
Felt like I never fit in
The first time you told me you loved me,
I doubted it..
But you kept saying it until I said it back...
I finally said it.
I told you i loved you and
you told me you wanted to be with me.
I finally felt like I finally found a place
that I was wanted,
You made me feel like I had a place in this world
and then one day you didn't care anymore..
A contest entry
- Scream my lungs out and try to get to you. by abmsem.
400 points, ended June 27, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - We Are Walking In Cracked Sunshine and Fractured Memories {Prewrites!!} by rainbows..
800 points, ended July 8, 223 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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I really like this, it is a very nice poem. But I believe it could be muchmuchmuchmuch better. Thank-you very much for entering this piece into my contest. -
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I went over it and revised it.. I hope it's ok..
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Much better.
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thats really good
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Thank you sis.. it really means alot coming from you and i mean it
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wow great poem it has so much emotions running through it.... really good job!
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Wow. It's like I wrote this, really. This is EXACTLY the way I feel and I can relate so much, I really feel the pain in this poem. I loved it. This has been one of the things I find hardest to write about. It is too painful for me and I don't seem to be able to put the words together and get the thoughts out of my head. But you did it, and it was amazing. Thank you for entering this, it's comforting knowing that someone else feels the same. Good luck in my contest.
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Thank you soo much. I never used to write poetry and when I did it took me forever to write it. Today I was just looking thru the contests and I found yours and it just came to me. One of my friends read the untitled poem yesterday and she said it was really good and that writing was her safe haven when she felt that way, and it is now one of my safe havens.
I never used to write and when I did I never let anyone see it because I thought it wasn't good enpugh for other people to se.. Now I know I was wrong..
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