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Sen no Hotaru ( A Thousand Fireflies )

The ebony tapestry falls
Tonight thoughts illuminate on fluttering wings
Unnumbered emotions in summer winds

Author notes

sen no hotaru is Japanese for " A thousands fireflies)

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  • Fire-Fly
    May 16

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    Three lines only - but those three lines say so much. Very effective in my opinion.

    You've put your words together very nicely.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.