Seduction fills her every thought
cantering inside her evil brain
swirling in the maze of want and need
for her eyes light up at the sight of fresh man.
She can't help it
that's just the way she was made
flirtatious by nature, temptress all on her own.
Men flock like seagulls
boys cower at her glance
her wicked ways, no match for a man in heat
raven hair, sultry smile
eyes that pierce even the sweetest soul.
Body language, subliminal to the noblest heart
her touch, her fixation... fleeting
for she means no harm within her loving gaze .
Heaven sent, she is not
but an angel with no halo
sent to take the world by storm
weaken the strong and strengthen the weak.
She knows not her power
yet she seeks to gain more
not knowing her every move
every silent word spoken
....leaves only ashes....
...... within the blaze of enticement.
Author notes
Wow.. I love this poem.. I love the freedom and wickedness of it! Go me.. yes.. I am gloating!This is merely because I seem to forget how good I really can write sometimes. I don't write too often anymore and writing something like this, for me, is a real ego boost! Thanks for taking a peek. 
Please tell me what you think
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This is hotness, You know after writing something like that you have the right to gloat and you added you pen-name in there as well thIS is hotter than hell... ooo that rhymes.. lol
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Welcome back sweetie!
I love this one from you!
I love it when author's incorporate their name
into their writes. Very descriptive and a great story you have told here. Well done and keep it up!
Jeremy0826
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love it!
brilliant, and more woman should be like this! we are strong!!! thanks for sharing this!
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Gloat on and rock on, my friend!
I think this is a fabulous write and one you SHOULD be proud of
Wishing you all the very best!!!
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Thank you so much my sweet friend! I am thrilled that you took the time to read this. I really do miss being here and chatting with everyone and reading all of your work, but life these days seems to get in the way of it, not that it is a bad thing, I just feel like I am neglecting my writing and my friends here. Just know you are always in my heart!Thank you again for your wonderful words of encouragement!
Love,
~Krys~
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Oooh I like! Hah gloat away hun, tis good. I especially liked the "men flock like seagulls" line - as a rule it's pretty true
I also really liked the line "heaven sent, she is not" mainly for the structure and how it gives it more interest and excitement than a bog standard "she's not sent from heaven"
I hope that made more sense to you than it did to me
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The writers words are quite seductive.
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"Heaven sent, she is not
but an angel with no halo"
She is naught? She is not?
I don't really get this line.
But the rest is goood. Love the descriptions.
Haha, way to love your own work though. There's nothing like self-confidence!
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laughing at the author notes here, blow your own trumpet loudly why don't you but yeah, nothing wrong with some self-confidence. anyway, the poem, it is a good poem, passionate and dancing and twisting in and out of love.
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I usually don't gloat.. that is not my style, but since lately I have not been writing much or even thinking of writing, to me, it is just worthy of a pat on the back.. lol.
Anyhow, glad you like it. Thanks for the comment!
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Its great too really,It shows the power of the Female.and Do i love it!!
Body language, subliminal to the noblest heart
This line was a bit awkward ...I did not understand ...subminimal to the noblest heart??/
Men flock like seagulls
boys cower at her glance
her wicked ways, no match for a man in heat
raven hair, sultry smile
eyes that pierce even the sweetest soul.
this stanza is great ,my favourite ..anyways Goodluck
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LOL, thanks for the comment. Glad you liked it! That line you speak of to me, means that even to the most noble and trustworthy of men (which is hard to find) the temptress can be like the devil when Eve took a bite of that apple.. they just cannot help themselves.. too tempting not to try! So for me, that line basically means that while they do not realize she is flirting, they are falling under spell.. subliminal A hidden message
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'tis a very fine write, and I am so glad that my spiritual beliefs do not include, that old fashioned notion that any sexual relationship/activity outside of heterosexual monogomous marriage is somehow evil. In other words, I thank the Supreme Being(s) that my spiritual beliefs are not conservative, nor would I choose to use Civil Law to impose them on others.
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wonderful, I really like the imagery in this piece. It's strong, clear and very vivid in the minds eye. The feeling of a deviant seductive creature really permeates through out the lines of you work. I feel it's an excellent piece.
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wonderful, yes. you should be proud, this is a lovely, wicked write and I so enjoyed reading it. I've known a few women like this in real life-and you're right. They don't know the power their looks afford them. The most vulnerable, diabolical motive for bringing men crawling to them. Excellent read, thanks so much.
Love,
jin
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Yay, I like this a lot. It's very devious and the feeling from it is very heady, like you're falling under her spell. Excellent.
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Aamazing!
You have written this poem really well, it just flows, and btw great use of personification...Well Done..and yes you are a good writer be proud x
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