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~The Flavor~

 

 

 

 

I feel the feet of my past walk over me, squatting,

looks me dead in the eyes, flickers seductively

and says.. do you remember? clattering against

the sanity of my mind, daring me to taste an old

delicious flavor.

 

 

Recalling every song he sang, he knew every

line and played it against my skin, made promises

I believed in......oh how divine his words were they

would rinse through my soul, stripping me naked bare

to the core without resistance, without conscience,

I was lucid to the very end.

 

 

And in those moments of remembrance, he had consumed

my every thought, I made my bed around his lies, and

I never knew the difference, and now I feel the feet of

my past coming up to tempt me once again, I hear its

sirens calls on the edge of a cliff willing me to fall.

 

 

leaving you the way I did, was the best screw

I ever gave you, now the flavor I taste

in my mouth is called…

 

 

~Freedom~

Author notes

 

AN : I have come to realize!


that learning to have discernment has been taught
to me by all the bumps and stumbles in the road and untruths
told, they say a man is  as good as his word,


I am still trying believe that’s true,. 
 
please leave a comment and applause's and i will gladly pay you back,  but since this is a anonymous please don't say my name,
 

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  • BluesMan gold member
    November 1

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    Insanity is repeating the same mistakes and expecting a different result! The truth can be quite painful and may leave one with a bitter taste in the mouth, but the fruits of new found freedom, empowerment and self worth are all the sweeter.
    I really enjoyed this bittersweet decloration of independance. You were well deserving of the Gold that you won.
    Thank you for entering my contest.

    Bill


  • SteveS gold member
    October 5
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    I had to revisit on of my very favorite poems by you. This really is a great piece of poetry. I need to start a "keeper" file. As soon as I do, this goes right in.


  • Xianaria gold member
    September 27

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    Wow Rend ~
    This is intensely moving, it's like watching this scene in your life unfold.
    I loved it, most worthy of the Gold!

    I'm still looking over these lines...and the AN.

    Wonderful piece, my friend.

    Love & blessings ~

    ~ Tim


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 26

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    the voice you give to the past has such an eerie quality lending strength to your emancipating lines. very well deliver.

  • This is gorgeous, and completely devastating. You have given voice to my thoughts, my history, here -- better than I have ever. I admire you for achieving a state where the separation tastes of freedom rather than exile or failure. What a marvelous piece. What a marvelous poet.


  • penman gold member
    July 10
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so well expressed. Congratulations on the gold. It was well deserved.


  • Gunther gold member
    June 30

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    You can't go back! Well, you can, but I wouldnt recommend it! Once walked on, leads to trampled if you let it. No one needs that. Very nicely done.
    This is "My Word" and it is good!
    congradulation on the well deserved GOLD.---Mark


  • rbruce gold member
    June 28

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    A brilliantly written precis on the attributes of man. And, all too often, true. But always remember that each coin has two sides. Enjoy your freedom, it's priceless.
    Congrats on the gold a worthy winner.


  • awannabepoet
    June 14

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    This is a very strong piece indeed you have penned that hymn that many a poor soul who is feeling a little freedom knows...

    It is easy to put on those old comfortable slippers and walk another mile into the abyss.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 4

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    The first line really grabbed me.
    ~I feel the feet of my past walk over me~ great visual.
    ~ I hear its sirens calls on the edge of a cliff willing me to fall.~~
    Wanting you to fall. I like how you used this.
    A gold here.

    Joe


  • Sandygram
    May 30

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    Excellent Write Dear Niece

    You ave pened a very heartfelt poem . It is true we are all only as god as our honesty and words. Too many untruths come into play and ruin many relationships. A pleasure to read your poem.

    This was so worthy of the Gold. Excellent imagery and full of emotion. Take care,

    Blessings, Aunt Sandy

  • silverfish
    May 18

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    i like the wings on the 'flavor' title. cute. i think once you're airborn, you won't be hearing footsteps over your shoulder.

    • Fishy,

      Nope foot steps here, your comment was most welcome
      thank you

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Ademon
    May 18

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    FUCKING LOVE IT!

    leaving you the way I did, was the best screw

    I ever gave you, now the flavor I taste

    in my mouth is called…





    ~Freedom~

    SOLID!!! Sucha beautiful ending to a magnificent poem of yours keep up the great work, best of your work thus far!!!! LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!

    • I am so glad you liked my poem,
      you are a sweeties as always

      Blessings

      Rend

  • SteveS gold member
    May 17

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    Well done. I have a particular liking to the word "lucid" in this poem, taking the definition to be "easily understood" in this instance, which alludes to the manipulative nature of the one you write about. Great conviction and within the context of the prompt.

    • Thank you so much for your Trophy
      what a blessing you have been to me,

      Thank you so much once again

      Rend

  • beautifully sad, but the ending speaks of realisation and the strength not to fall back into the quagmire of empty and broken promises sooo many men make...
    freedom is the best taste ever

  • Recalling every song he sang, he knew every
    line and played it against my skin, made promises
    I believed in..

    awesome the way you played the words
    like a melody still remembered and knew every note .. for the music knows the way the story flows..
    well done penned from the begining to the end
    Hugs Angel☻

    • thank you so much for your
      comment,

      Be blessed in all you do

      Blessings

      Rend

  • My god I read the opening stanza and onwards
    I felt the taste, the imagery of suduction and then the sweet taste again, this time of a certain revenage
    a wonderful twist and loved it hun
    best wishes and good luck
    Julie x

  • friend
    May 16

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    you are so right about the best screw you ever gave him and to be sure, the only one he can still recall. well done!

    • yup and me too, glad you stopped by my Friend,
      blessings to you always see ya later

      Rend


  • penman gold member
    May 16
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    Excellent

    So very well expressed. A very detailed and powerful write. Best of luck in the contest.

    • Thank you so much for commenting,
      and giving me clappies, you are a treasure to me,

      Blessings and love

      Rend

  • "Recalling every song he sang, he knew every
    line and played it against my skin"
    I love this line. A very sentimantal pice here Rend.
    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken

    • Thank you so much Mr Maverick!
      its always a pleasure to have you come and read
      Blessings
      Rend


  • DolceVito gold member
    May 16

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    Outstanding write, beautifully bittersweet, excellent take on the prompt...I love it...Nicely done
    Vito

    • Hey Vito,
      once again I am blessed, Thank you so much for stopping
      and commenting & clappies yeah!

      Blessings my friend

      Rend

  • Very inciteful and incisive, it's a well wandered road by all of us, though the bumps and bruises, stumbles, falls and lies, hurts and damages caused along the way aren't just caused by men, I can attest to that from life-long experience.

    Unfortunately, we all do it, it's in our nature, even those who try to fight against it, to better themselves, to not cause such pains, at some point or another, we all do it even without realising and none of us are blameless.

    Getting away from the point a bit there though, thanks to the thoughts, impression and emotions that this piece invoked.

    Good write.

    • your comment is filled with so much truth, and I just can relate to this so much
      no we are not blameless for being naive, you get enough of them and you learn
      the hard way,

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 16

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    Goodness

    this is superb!! very real, gritty, sensual 'in your face ' imagery..absolutely loved it too many great lines, starting with the first one! ..I feel the feet of my past walk over me, squatting,

    looks me dead in the eyes, flickers seductively

    and says.. do you remember? wow

    • yes, you are right my friend, every one has something that's not good for them that comes back to tempt them, oh the strength it requires to turn away
      thank you so much for coming by and commenting and the applause wow
      Blessings

      Rend

  • You have searched your soul hun and this is strong and a statement of who and what you wish to be C

    • Chez, thank you so much for your comment oh yes,
      stronger in my faith, least i stumble and fall
      Thank you again,

      Love and Blesssings

      Rend

  • wow... thanks it does fit us both.... good luck sissy and thanks for sharing!

    • Yes it does fit us so well, let freedom reign in our lives sweet sis,
      we diserve to be free,
      Blessings and love sis

      Rend


  • Rose Angel gold member
    May 15

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    The message weaved through your lines speaks of freedom from the blackmail tactics of relationships some of we women find ourselves.. Creatively penned. Strong language to emphasize determined disgust, and a strong farewell!
    Gives strong ammunition to those who need to act for their freedoms sake!
    I wish you well in the contest, Rend..Mom

    • Thank you I just love your comments and appreciate your clappies.
      you always seem to give a deep thought provoking comment

      Blessings and love

      Rend

  • Wondefully expressed dear one.
    Enjoyed this piece.

    Good luck

    Love
    Passions

    • Passions,

      thank you for stopping and giving me applauses and a comment,
      blessings always

      Rend


  • Daizee silver member
    May 15

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    This comes an hour after I heard from an ex tonight. Tempting as it seemed, I said no. The flavor of freedom is a sweet, sweet tastse and I relish it too much to go back. You've outdone yourself this time. I applaud you and admire you...

    • thank you so much Stacy you are a strong women to have said no,
      as tempting as it may be,(i know that!)

      Thank you so much for the clappys and comment

      Rend

  • Oh this was coolio & with killer ANs too.

    Be Well

    Mark

    • Thank you Mark, you slip in out, and i am happy when you stop and comment, and clappys too,!

      Blessings

      Rend

  • Ouch... I feel you here Rend... I really do.
    Eloquently put.

    • Thank you White Stone, I know, i feel your writes too and Fabulous I might have to add! thank you for your comments and clappys'

      Blessings

      Rend

  • "it's a high fly into center field folks, going, going gone!"


    Wonderful piece Rend.

    Love, Michael.

    • thank you so much Michael, out of the park huh,
      home run! yeah! your Tops as always
      Blessings and Love

      Rend

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