Eyes the color of the crystal clear sky
A warmth like no other
An angel to guide me
All i ask is why?
Blessed with your love
I glide through life
An angel sent from above
You take away all my strife
Never before have i felt this way
With you, I can make it through the day
Heaven sent to set me free
With you, i can finally be me
Author notes
This shows how i feel about my gf. (option 6)
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Nicely done!
Thanks for entering
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Very lovely write.
Great imagery and good flow here.
Bravo
♥ Kate -
Interesting rhyme scheme. Overall the poem was adorable and sweet. A little cliche, but it doesn't really matter. Adorably sweet write! Keep penning!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ The Rocker Who Lost All -
awww. i totally knew this was about her. its sooo cute. im sure she loves it. i like it that you write stuff for her. its really nice. <3
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This is cute. A little to cutesy and not really as deep as I was looking for but i am sure that your girlfriend adored it. I may be missing the point of the rhyme scheme but it doesn't seem to work for me. I am sorry. I think that the idea of the poem is good but the poem just isn't as good as it could be.
Thanks for entering.
Nikk -
I like your poem, the differing rhyme pattern works well.
The first stanza form is very good, reducing meter lengths does always help flow. particularly at the introduction.
Your choice of words suits the subject Angels, Chrystal, blessed, heaven, glide all work very well.
Not struck by the line end "me" twice.
When you ask a question doesn't deserve a question mark?
Good luck
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This is most well done. I would like to sit down with you and talk about the in and out of this poem. The work is most interesting.
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very etherial and distant, I like it its classy
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pretty babe
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This is incredibly sweet.
Beautiful Write!!
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Hey, thanks for the entry! ;o
here are your prompt(s):
tell me about the time you met an angel.
title: angels in peril;
GOOD LUCK!
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