Shattered hearts
Disturbed minds
Severed limbs
Detached world
Tanks and M4’s are all we need to sustain
Yet with victory, sweeps in the incessant pain
Our bodies are broken and torn and dirty
Riddled and rattled by the public enemy
Fear in the essence of vigilant crosshairs
Loaded chambers, barrel pointed to multibillionaires
It’s mine for my people, I must do what is right
I must kill to survive in this toxic refuse site
While RPG’s and 88’s persist into the heat of night
Greedy old men sit and chat under veils of naïve delight
Heavy cost
Max profits
Commonwealth
One purpose
The corporate spearhead delves deeper into the wounds
Excavating, extorting, exasperating power tycoons
Uniform in duty and in his thoughts
The cost of what you’re fighting for is severely overwrought
With grotesque patriotism in spotlights at home
While brothers die slowly in the shells of bile and foam
Surrender ourselves in the hopes of world peace?
Or puppet our minds for the rich, oily feasts?
A new world order in which we are the police
As our children absorb the lies told by hypocritical priests
“It is sweet and honorable to die for one’s country”
Yet, the children murdered lie faceless under war’s debris
Author notes
Jay Dead
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I am really liking this part ~
Riddled and rattled by the public enemy
Fear in the essence of vigilant crosshairs
Loaded chambers, barrel pointed to multibillionaires
It’s mine for my people, I must do what is right
I must kill to survive in this toxic refuse site
the flow and ryhme is exceptionally well
this bit is very true :
Heavy cost
Max profits
Commonwealth
One purpose
And you last lines - WOW they are great!! Brings home the truth of the pain behind war eh?
Ty for sharing this xx
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you learned all this to be your truth from where ? age 19 from tv? books? or ap buddies this is sad.
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what are you saying? u saying you agree or disagree?
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First, congrats on winning the silver. You earned it in my opinion. I really loved how you expressed the truthfullness of the folly of war, and I loved how you ended it. War is something that plagues mankind. I believe the root of war is hate.
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Great write
very good flow, very emotional thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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Well worded and well expressed. Your pint of victory came across well.. Very intense. Good luck in the contest my friend. Your writing is extraordinary... Keep your peen flowing
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Wonderful flow and rhythm you have here. It's quite an intense piece you have written that comes across really well.
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i agree
I think that you got your point acroos clearly and beautifully.
Very nice.
And thanks for entering.
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outstanding social commentary
you rock poet
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