Sharp as knives
cutting into my soul
this wanting and needing
of you...
It's not easy
going for what you want
afraid of rejection
afraid of being alone - again...
Drinking in your scent
Dissolving in your eyes
waiting for that moment
the moment of absolution...
Burning to your core
with the purity
of true happiness
praying that it doesn't dissipate...
Holding my thoughts
inside my heart
waiting for you to touch me
and making those thoughts reality...
Will you hold me
in your heart
'till night comes in
and touches the sky???
Please tell me what you think
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I like this plaintive piece, this neediness that you're not afraid to show to this man. I hope he's good to you. If you want to improve, I'll just say that the first stanza is the best IMO, the imagery is so strong. The weakest part IMO is the third stanza which is not as creative as the rest of it. But overall, this rocks.
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amazing
I love this write wish I could hold you
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