Loves bitter pill,
tear stained face, heavy with pain
suffocating within an acrid smog of emotions
trying to find comfort within memories
heart a jigsaw puzzle...one piece missing
YOU!
A contest entry
- Matters of the Heart.. by darell.
1000 points, ended May 18, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A very very sad piece of writing. Very deep and so emotional as well. Powerful piece of a lost love Sugar. Well done for your trophy win. This should have got gold though.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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Thank you hon, as always it's a pleasure to have you read
your comments always valued and appreciated.
DL Chelle xxx
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Clever and emotionally rich. Well done.
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Wow.
It's as if I'm reading about my own relationship here. Very dramatic words expressed here, sis. Good one.
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Impressive!
I love the way you expressed your
pain. The metaphors you used
evoked powerful images of reflection.
Great work. Best wishes
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"suffocating within an acrid smog of emotions" ... as only a lost love can do. That one piece is so important and when it goes missing life could not feel worse but broken hearts mend with time and patience
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