A fragile adult shell, with
little girl huddled inside,
open heart, tender to touch
and she will weep tears of fear.
Views herself as damaged goods,
put her on sub-standard shelves.
She will hide as best she can
and weep her tears of failure.
Reaching out to passersby,
trying to find a soul mate.
Seeking lame ducks in haystacks
and crying her tears of shame.
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Errrmmm - most embarrassing moment, I seriously can't remember.
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wow
really good write fav verse is A fragile adult shell, with
little girl huddled inside,
open heart, tender to touch
and she will weep tears of fear.
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Judge's Verdict.
I liked the way this poem was going, but the way you ended it made it seem unfinished. -
i love this poem. i think its awsome. very sad but awsome! i love the way you discrbed everything in it. yay!
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Wow, you have really hit a nerve with this one, too many people can relate to that girl hiding in the shell.
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whisper
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wonderful write, I enjoyed it very much, I found much similarity in my own experiences!
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to bad you had no Jacks with shinny armor walking by lol...
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