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Blood Lust

Locked in this dirty room with you.
All your whining ceased.
Hands and mouth bound with duct tape
All my shiny torture tools beckoning unto me
My feverish brain clouded with insanity
Evil thoughts of what I will do to you
swim through my mind
You stare at me with wild eyes as
I run my fingers over menacing tools

Fear oozes from your every pore

as I pick up my saw.

I can hear you screaming as my blade

Cuts into your wrists.

The sound of bone crunching as I saw

only feeds my lust to see your blood spill.

As I saw through your second wrist

I know never again will you hurt another

as you hurt me.

Next I use a buzz saw to remove your feet

Never again will the sound of your menacing footsteps

Send fear to another woman or child.

Your screaming has stopped as

I see you drift in and out of consciousness.

I am covered in your blood

I stare down at your half open eyes I say

'Never again'!

Turn and leave you there to drip

every last bit of your nasty blood on the filthy floor

 

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  • darkyinsoul
    October 7

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    Chilling write you have penned
    excellent imagery
    well done poetess!!
    Thanks for the share
    Darky


  • Knight70 silver member
    October 5

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    Holy Shit!

    I'm at the edge of my seat, reaching for those dismembered pieces. These images will haunt me for days. Take the backseat, Leatherface! A new girl's in town!

    Don

    • Firequeen
      October 5
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      hehe thank you so much Knight
      I really appreciate the read and the comment.
      I can't help it my head is filled with sick and twisted lil stories...
      Maybe i read to many R.L stine books as a teenager.. or its all the stephen king books and movies i have watched and read..lmao


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    September 9

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    This is chillingly dark and gory. I bet he deserved every last bit of that pain
    Great piece!


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    September 2

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    The gross out method! I love me some gore, I love revenge and I enjoyed the Saw movies which this brought to mind. A great write.


    • Firequeen
      September 2
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      wow it reminded you of saw now there is a cool thing thank you


  • rrw gold member
    September 1

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    eeeeek! That's what call "getting your comeuppance!" Strangely facintating as well as brutal.... very matter of fact... no emotion... which is probably the only way one could do such a thing. I think it's called "hitting the calm" where there's nothing but the need to kill and/or torture the abuser... Great job.


  • Lamia
    August 19

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    Ooh...this is so delightfully twisted. It's disturbing, but this was written with some taste and class and with clear forethought. I know that sounds like an odd thing to say but I think it's true. So many poems like this are just mindless and completely tasteless, but this has some depth to it and if nothing else it has a freakin' purpose which is always nice to see. An excellent poem. Congrats on the shiny green trophy


  • Paloszoo gold member
    July 11

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    Niiiiiice. Disturbing and creepy. I'd like to fulfill this fantasy someday with a few choice people Thanks for entering my rounds contest and for showing your work here. It's a pleasure reading it!


    • Firequeen
      July 11
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      Haha i think we all have a few choice people we would like to do this too.
      Thank you for the contest


  • RemovedName
    June 25

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    Shiit!

    When i was reading this wondrous poem i was really into it and then the door slamed...lets just say i have a hole to fix

    • Firequeen
      June 25
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      scared ya did i?
      this has become one of my favorites as of late
      I really stepped out of the box this one but i liked it too
      thank you so much i very much appreciate your comment

  • Your screaming has stopped as
    I see you drift in and out of consciousness.
    I am covered in your blood
    I stare down at your half open eyes I say
    'Never again'!
    Turn and leave you there to drip
    every last bit of your nasty blood on the filthy floor

    Oh my goodness I loved the whole thing! Great imagry I feel the same way toward someone who really hurt me. Beautifully done!

    ~purplelover~


    • Firequeen
      June 19
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      Thank you so very much.
      I really enjoyed writing this and glad other like it too
      fire

  • This is amazing i love it

    this poem is very dark, each word you write so full of power, but i love it , amazing write keep up the fantasic work


    • Firequeen
      May 20
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      Well thank you very much for your kind words. means a lot to me.

  • Love it...

    Got the bastard...
    Intense, vivid & captivating in its blood lust & charm...
    Deliciously dark with such delightful imagery & flow...
    Remind me never to piss you off Sis...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • this is intense, just like watching
    a horror flick...
    i'm all jumpy and stuff now
    thank you for sharing
    your talented & twisted mind


    ~Pastel


    • Firequeen
      May 18
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      Well thank you my dearest friend that means alot to me
      haha seems my twisted side agrees with me latley

  • I love the way your mind works, my friend...a little bit twisted & wicked, but mine is right there too lol
    Hugs,
    Selena


  • Lexie - gold member
    May 16

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    OUCH BABY!!!!!

    FUCK, GIRL THIS ROCKS LOL
    hunny you shock and amaze me but most of all
    EXTREMLY IMPRESSED!!!!


    • Firequeen
      May 16
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      thank you baby
      Stepping out of my comfort zone.
      so glad you enjoyed my twisted dark sadistic side hehe

  • AWESOME i love it

    Wow, what an awesome poem this is so good, if it where up to me I think this would be the one. Good luck in the contest

  • It's creepy, but i couldn't stop reading it. Very nice.


  • Jayde1
    May 15

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    nasty

    this is a twisted piece...i luv it......made me tink of a film i struggled watching called hostel,
    nice work....i felt uncomfatable reading it.....which i hope was the desired effect.......niceone

    • Firequeen
      May 15
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      Yep thats what i was going for.
      Wanted the readers to squirm in their seats as they read on.
      Thank you for the wonderful comment.


  • darell
    May 15

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    Damn!!!

    It's not nice to fool with mother nature!lol
    Baby, this was extremely intense.
    I know to call you when punishment
    is warranted on the evil and demented.
    A shocking piece that haunts the imaginary
    of the mind. A strong write with a definate
    message. WOW!!


    • Firequeen
      May 15
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment.
      Shock and awe is what i was going for


  • Andi. gold member
    May 15

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    oooh, i love it.
    very much what i was looking for, great job, thanx for entering, and best of luck dear poet

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