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27





I walked out that early evening
and the moon sat there,
         like a distant dreamer
         on a perfect tree.

 

 

Some clouds clothed the scene
as they mirrored orange
left by noon.
     Somehow,
     those shards of sunlight
     reminded me how to spell hope
                          and happiness.

 


   I lipped -

      then figured,
         I was emptied from words
            long before I realised
               the sun can fall as well.

 


The day after -

I turned 27,

             still had a single status
              and failed some more.



 

 

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 18

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    20.4/25

    I loved the way you wrote this, it really tends to grasp the reader. Thanks so much for sharing, dear!


  • ladylyric
    May 28

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    This gave me goosebumps!

    "I lipped-
    then figured ,
    I was emptied from words"
    Wow. I'm at a loss for words myself. Absolutely beautiful.
    And if it's any consolation...I'm 28 and every day of my pathetic life seems like a failure.
    Lot's of Love Shannon Rose

  • patron saint
    May 19

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    I am sorry for this loneliness Leander. Know that you are a brilliant, brilliantly wonderful man and I have years of knowing that. I wish you, always, the best.

    J


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    May 16

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    Oh my god. Your poetry always hits me, and this one just really punched the crap out of me. Love this.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Tristan Storm
    May 16
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    Great!


  • Jane Doe Lives
    May 16

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    I love the layout of the poem and the way the piece flows - its very fitting. I especially liked the lines "reminded me how to spell hope and happiness" and "the sun can fall as well". I also really like the comparison of the moon to the dreamer in the tree.



  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 16

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    The sun just sets and rises again, and so do you, each day with new words and hopes.
    Life is saving the best for last, just for you
    hou van jou


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    May 15

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    awesome write...except for the last line mister
    this is more like it:


    "reminded me how to spell hope and happiness"

    yay!

    Tasha
    dikke knuffel


  • vieve gold member
    May 15

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    Love 'the sun can fall as well'. Your opening stanza is excellent. Great imagery throughout.

    I enjoyed 27, but only because I prefer the odd years to the evens and 7 is my favorite #.

    Agree with previous comment, the formatting is very good. Fits the content well. Enjoyed the read.


  • Antebellum
    May 15
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    love the form to this. great write.

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