There's something wrong with me
I can feel it when i breathe
There's something here i've misconcieved
And all of those childhood dreams were just make believe
Dancing and floating a smile so pure
Eyes glistening without a search for a remorseful cure
Now the mask is removed
And new thoughts leave me confused
As the sky sheds cinders
Where the sparkling snow once fell
As the lights dim
And i take my final bow
Only an act
Now a toast to an oblivious end
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This is going to be a piano piece. Please let me know what you think
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I like the "sky sheds cinders" Nice write.
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i think thatd be an awesome set of lyrics to add a piano piece to. do u play piano?
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oh, I think it very fine, indeed, my only suggestion is to change the final line...if you lookup the definition of "oblivious" I think you will see why... fine stuff...
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Oh my this is great, your pen is always froth with such wonderful imagery and emotions.
I really love this piece and would love to hear it set to music.
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