against runic midnight gleam
roll over blanket of fantasy
drink chalice of lethe
in land of dream
worlds inside of me
canoe it's furious rivers
majestic waterfalls
mountains to climb above the clouds
...standing then
by the golden cist looking down
taking in summer's kiss
---beauty---
warmth of the moonlight glow
alone to the palaces
where they scheme and plan
where beauty is chained
by the worlds of the moons
where they live to scope
the stars
waves crash against fragile bones
calculating next polarity
in summer's dew
Free that what once was
slumber by the misty moon
Grows from flowers of summer
along routes of withered ones
an ash trail by mage
that many that lay dead
dreams never are feed
rest with silent head
that we hold deer
with invisible strings to press
A contest entry
- Prompt me! ~*~DARK~*~ by Night Terrors.
550 points, ended May 16, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did this poem say to you?
Comments
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That poem really inspires some great poetry, or it did in this case. Your poem really was amazing.
The Positives:
You have a great poem all kinds of great imagery and emotion that was really beautiful
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
waves crash against fragile bones
calculating next polarity
in summer's dew
Free that what once was
slumber by the misty moon
Grows from flowers of summer
along routes of withered ones
an ash trail by mage
Great part here really beautiful
Overall:
Imagery: 20/25
Style: 17/25
Unique : 20/25
Sound: 20/25
Take on prompt: 19 /25
I give this a 96/125 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~ -
okay your prompt is:
read the poem The Sleeper By Edgar Allen Poe and write about about what it brings to mind. Don't use any part of the poem in your poem though.
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