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Darkness exist in me

angels stay away from me,
and devils come so i will be with you in hells gate,
for i am a loner in this world,
for i am a cursed to this world,
my heart is now a stone,
for i have no mercy at all,
my mind is full of scheme,
for i am a destroyer,
i want to die,
so the people will be happy,
without me they will be ecstatic,

i am loveless,

for i don't feel love,

or any love shown to me,

i wont feel or any of it,

i am a lonely girl,

i don't have any true friends,

even once,

nobody cares me,

i am in deep grief,

and no one understand me,

my brain is drain,

for i can think good,

but bad i will,

my good thoughts are gone,

and my dreams a faded,

i don't care if what is happening,

for i have no pity on people,

i am selfish,

for i always think of myself,

i am ungrateful person.............

Author notes

that's what i feel.......i truly give my all emotion to this, my feelings that i cant explain!!

"Nobody can tell you how you feel, what you think, or what to say. Not even your own mind."

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  • Shantti
    August 4

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    I could feel the torant of rage as I read this. Very strong , I love the way you wrote this. I also notice that the only single capitalization you made throughout the whole poem is "Darkness" in the title. I find that a lovely touch for such a dark write, it's subtle yet powerful subliminally, darkness is the focus.
    Very well done, thank you for entering my contest


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    July 30
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    very sad


  • dying inside 4ever
    July 13
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    emotional and dark it flows as it goes fab job and good luc


  • Mango Memories gold member
    July 8
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    oh very very emotional!

    I love poetry thats raw.

    This is brillant, well done!


  • Antebellum
    July 5
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    Thanks so much for entering
    &&
    Good luck
    [if you are placed in the finalists I will leave a better comment]


  • Fallen-Thumper
    June 28

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    really liked this and i can see that you put all of your emotion into it. Fantastic and every word was really strong. loved every line. Amazing!


  • love4poems
    June 27

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    thanks for the entry, good luck in all the contests. for mine at least it was a bit off topic, its a strong emotion but there is no color that you compare it too love the beginning.


  • Dragonbabyx3
    June 23
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    This is a very good write, but I think you may want to do some revisions. Capitalize your "I's" and read through it slowly to see the things that need to be changed. If you want a more indepth look into it, Just sent me a note, and I will help you. This piece has a wonderful potential to be a great piece!


  • Aspirin Lullaby
    June 20

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    Great job. I'm so glad you put all of your emotion into it. It certainly shows. I'm so amazed at the turnout after only eight hours! Getting to see some awesome talent from everyone.

    Great job and good luck!

  • Fallen-Thumper
    June 20
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    wow this holds alpot of raw emotion and it is really well portrayed. i really like this and it is really well written. reaslly good and i really liked it.

  • Antebellum
    May 26

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    for i am a loner in this world,
    for i am a cursed to this world,
    my heart is now a stone,
    for i have no mercy at all,
    my mind is full of scheme,


    amazing write. raw emotions you can really feel wgat your saying.


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    May 26

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    Wow the raw emotion here makes the poem all the more greater! Its a brilliant write! I am an optimist so I must point out that I am more than sure that there is someone that truely does care for you... You have a lot of talent yo! Great Job =]


  • Arjita gupta
    May 20
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    I am touched...you are very brave to vent out your true feelings.....lolzzzz

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