Into the sunset we sail,hand in hand,
Eyes locked in silent communication..
Our hearts bound by the power of our love,
Beat rhythmically, to the tune of the waves
And the songs of the mermaids
And the cry of the seagulls.
Waves, rise and raise a pang of emotion,
The breeze with its cool touch
Sets my soul on fire,
Love is simple, and so complex alike
For to win is to lose
And to lose is to win...
Today, we are together once again
Sailing into the future,
But who knows what tomorrow holds
Separation, for a lifetime, an eternity..
But for the moment, let us enjoy in bliss
The sea, the sunset and the serene scenery.
Author notes
Actually, I didn't read the instructions..
But I would like to submit this poem. This is poem just a wish, a wish that the bygone days would come back, just for once...
Written March 12th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i loved this poem, the promise and the uncertainty of love and future
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Beautifully written for the most part. Simple language that held me captive. Glad to see another! Thank you for sharing, CookieZeal
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Eyes locked in silent communication: this emotion is so strong - a breathtaking poem, of love and anticipation - I;m so pleased you entered the contestagain. thank You and Good Luck
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Aha, there is another one! Silly me. This is very well done, especially for not reading the rules. I enjoyed this poem, thank you for sharing!
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The image of two sets of eyes locked was a strong one that I could envision throughout the entire piece. Saying more than mere words could accomplish. Excellent poem. I am thrilled to see another one of yours. This time it follows the directions for the contest!
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Glad to see you wrote one to fit with the contest criteria Would have been a shame not to as both this and the other piece that didn't fit is absolutely stunning. Perfect beauty.
Take care and good luck
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I think it fits quite well actually and I really enjoyed it, I totally agree sometimes we just have to relish the moment we are in right now!
Good Luck!
Lakota x -
stunning write...some of the best imagery i have seen in the contest...beautifully done!!...good luck in the contest!..hugs..leanne xx
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This is simply beautiful (pause for a b-i-g sigh......) And yes, you can enter this poem. The flow is wonderful and the sentiment is sad, yet loving. (little tongue twister there in the last line)
Thank you for entering this
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You did very well I would sayfor not reading the rules. It could read as a newly married couple off to the Americas to start their lives together; or lovers stealing a weekend. Nice write and good luck in the contest.
--Willow--
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