along a cottage green borrows
the apple chilled life
open and bite
what is this
a hand of memory
scartching at me
lives ripple simply into
golbled golbins'
loosing teeth
of borrowed dreams into shapes
dancing visions
hold me tight in golden arms
lift the golbin into me foot
shattered opening is over
tinnnnnnnnnn............saves
open the next dream
apple posion to sacered hopes
gobblin hubble in skies wisdom
A contest entry
- Goblins by Lilreddragon.
600 points, ended May 26, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like " along a cottage green borrows" , and I like the way you spelled goblins"golbins".
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This doesn't make a whole lot of sense. I see some imagery, but I have little idea where you are actually taking this. Maybe I'm missing something. Anyways, good luck in the contest, and where ever did you come up with the title, that was interesting!
Schmitty -
I liked the images I got from this, snow white, the hubble telescope, etc., but I can't tell if you are making up words, deliberately scrambling words, or simply misspelling: Line 1. borrows (boroughs?), Line 8. golbled golbins (gobbled goblins?) LIne 13 golbin (goblin?) LIne 17 sacered (sacred?) -- this was distracting to me, but if it was intended perhaps you could put in your AN that you intended it as written, to make us think outside the box. I really think this shows talent. I just got confused.
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