Love at first sight, ha!
Only if I look past flaws
too many to count.
Yet somehow you still hold me
and I cannot let you go.
I revel in you
and your eccentricies.
Maybe we deserve
each other and noone else
for all our days together.
I am not faultless -
I want you after you left
I still want you back
And damn your new boy to hell
like you've damned me to my own.
You have scarred my mind
left gouges of love in there
that won't scab over.
I love you, and I hate you.
I'll never get over you.
Author notes
Prompt was Ludo's song "Love Me Dead." I acutally struggled a lot with this, as I could not really replicate the song's sarcasm in a poem like I wanted to. So, I went the other way and iamgined the earnestness behind the song instead, and why this guy would stick with such a...unique girl, even after she's gone off with someone else. I made the poem a string of tankas (5-7-5-7-7 syllable count), mainly because I'm partial to that form.
A contest entry
- Song Prompt Contest by Calandra Jane.
700 points, ended May 31, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please feel free to leave a critical review.
Comments
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'Love Me Dead' by Ludo
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You even give me a Missouri band to work with (granted, the other side of the state I live on...). This'll be great. Now, do I focus on the song's sarcasm, or the hapless loser it focuses on?
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Hmmm. How about the loser with sarcasm? I'm not sure. I just love the song. Either will be fine. =]
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Looking over the other poems in the contest and the options that almost got picked, I sure wish I had gotten The Wrong Band. But then, I entered the contest 'cause I liked all the songs that had been revealed so far.
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