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lung cancer

She smiled, as if she knew what was in store for her.

Violent, silent screaming resounding in a sickened mind. The weight of it all is unbearable as gravity brings her crashing down to her knees. Scarred palms clap over ears as if they could block it all out, and she knows the carpet will offer no solace for her tears. Lights blare accusingly, and mirrors laugh with maniacal triumph as the one known as "unbreakable" breaks into one thousand shattered fragments.

She wants to find relief from the world with her tears, but time yanks its chain, and she's already standing. The floor forgets her fall, but the mirrors cherish its sickening memory of collapse like bittersweet blackmail. She, too, knows she won't forget this night, or the reason behind the fall.

She remembers that the windows were too few and too far above her head, and that her lungs were losing oxygen--fast. She recalls how she could hear voices screaming in whispers, reminding her that she shouldn't be here, that she couldn't have this last dance, that she doesn't really exist at all.

Scarlet is still fresh in her mind. Yesterday's severances remain angry and closed off, but her eyes bleed transparency and her heart is under attack.

All she wants is for it to stop.

Author notes

Sometimes, the most potent poison is from your own thoughts.

Based off real events in my life.

The title could be related to lung cancer in the sense that there currently is no cure. It is suffocating. It is pure, slow, torturous pain. It is drowning in your own blood, with no escape. Falling slowly...

I had a dear friend who died from it. This is not about him, though...merely an allusion to pain of a different sort.

And this poem is possibly the hardest, most painful that I've ever written.

Tell me what you think.

For MysteriousWhisper: Prompt: #3.
For Girl With Guitar: Prompt: Mental Health/Teen Depression.

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  • Hikari Lady
    August 18

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    You've done a great job on this prose piece. I really enjoyed reading it. Your metaphor was really well placed and your thoughts and how you related this emotional trauma to lung cancer was a very haunting touch to your piece. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    Love
    ~Noor


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    June 24

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    I'm getting a lot of prose in my contest. I automatically assume that poets on a poetry site would submit poetry into a poetry contest. Alas...
    Good content, good vocabulary. Thanks for the entry.


    • Nienna Calmcacil
      June 28
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      I'm sorry that you're disappointed by the amount of prose in your contest. Many people write prose on this site because they consider prose to have so much poetic language that it should be considered poetry, no matter the length or format. I agree with that, but I respect your opinion as well. Thank you for reading my entry.


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    June 11

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    .. this is so sad. I'm sorry for your loss. There are a lot of people who feel your pain.
    Good Luck and your imagery is beautiful.
    Rose


  • MysteriousWhisper
    June 6

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    this is so sad and tragic. but there are beautifully crafted images and is very well written. good job and good luck in the contest!


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    May 31
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    This is really sad and tragic. Beautifully written. I know your pain and it will get better.
    Rose


  • Guerrero
    May 29
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    wow.. it is crazy powerful and amazing. the slowest poison is ones own thoughts.. very good


  • DarkHunter
    May 16
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    This is a powerful write, best of luck in the contest.


  • August Starlight silver member
    May 16

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    It's dark, but I really like dark things.
    The first paragraph is amazingly awesome.
    Good luck in the contests.


  • BreakingTheSurface
    May 14
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    Very...dark, it seems, but descriptive. It's hard to be suffocating in your own life.

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