Please don't leave me
There's nothing I can do
And nothing I can say
To show how much
I need you to stay
Without you there's nothing
Except cold darkness
And white noise
There'll be nothing more left
For me to enjoy
Stay with me longer
Stay till I'm old
And there's nothing new for me
Not anything
For me to see
Please tell me what you think
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I loved this! The only thing I would change is "Loose." Loose is like....ex: An object is loose. What you want is "Losing." Otherwise, I loved it.
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Thanks
I can't spell!
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This is great. I can really feel the emotion in this. I like it. Makes me think about things I've lost. Very well writen. ^.^
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To loose once sight, must be the most terrible of tragedies. To loose someone who is such a visionary in one's life is also unimaginable.
Thought the first stanza a good strong introduction, thought L8 inventive unusual word combination works well.
Very tender subject dealt with sympathy and talent.
Liked your poem.thank you.
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this is so beautoiful i almost fell in love. stunning work
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oh this is superb, it is so soul wrenchingly touching
bravo
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wow very very very sweet!
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Thanks
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