Surrounded by darkness
drowning in pain
smothered in silence
held down by these chains
tighter they wrap
you're gasping for air
you can't catch your breath
now overwhelmed with despair
feeling the pressure
crying the tears
left hopeless and broken
for your screams no one hears
feeling so abandoned
trying not to cry
trying not to think of
how bad they want you to die
out of desperation
you drag a blade across your wrist
making it sink deeper
for you know you won't be missed
blood running from the wounds
your wrist innocent and scarred
the proclein sink turns crimson
then you suddenly hit the floor hard
pain now easing softly
razor blade still in hand
you hope they're finally happy
for your death went just as planned.
Author notes
http://suteishiijein-poetry.deviantart.com/art/the-pain-of-self-harm-116873349
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2446647 came 4th here 
A contest entry
- The Cutters And The Suicidal by Juggalette Sammy.
1000 points, ended May 22, 28 entries
Honorable mention
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Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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oh my God this is amazing... such a powerful write. such vivid images. This is a magnificent piece of writing. well done!
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thank you
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wow this was really relatable. Being I myself am a cutter. Been one since I was 8. So for almost 10 years.
Imagery/20
Style/30
background/5
Prompt used/40
Prewrite/0
fresh write/50
Points: 145
Fave part: blood running from the wounds
your wrist innocent and scarred
the proclein sink turns crimson
then you suddenly hit the floor hard
pain now easing softly
razor blade still in hand
you hope they're finally happy
for your death went just as planned. -
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thanks x
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very emotional and sad... good luck with the contest
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thanks
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for your death went just as planned.
such a powerful line. sometimes its a good thing they do, and in another its too bad the do. i love the veiw on this one. great peice -
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thank you
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This is very good! I loved it and you took a great view on the prompt. Great job and Good luck in the contest.
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