Immersed in the thoughts of the past
Drunken on the wine of grief
Who can ever fathom the agony
Of a withered shriveled autumn leaf
Separated from the bosom of its home
And the merry company of the foliage
Is now a mere lifeless shadow
Of its glorious radiant former image
Who shall care for an yellowed leaf
Dead, uncared by the world
For now the beauty has faded
From its once shimmering youthful glory
Fear not, nay, little leaf
For I am just like thee.., my friend
A speck in the universe, a particle of cosmic dust
I seek for this wretched life to end.
Author notes
It is so easy to dream of achieving greatness. And when life disappoints us, it is equally hard to accept failure..A few verses that may seem depressing..and probably are.
Written March 12th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Gorgeous poem. I mean it. I just wish it fit the criteria for this contest. I wouldn't change much in it, so it might just go for your own list! Thank you for sharing! Warmly, CookieZeal
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It is a lovely poem and I look forward to reading your next entry for the contest.
Welcome to Allpoetry
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Thank you all!!
Actually, you are right!! It does have spelling mistakes. 
And yeah!! I recently joined the list and just posted the poem without reading the rules !! Have a lovely day!!
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This poem is very powerful, with a lot of imagery. I enjoyed it. There is a lot of feeling in lonliness and lost love. There are a few spelling errors, but other then that its great! I hope you enter another, you have great talent!
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This is a very well written piece. My only disappointment is that it doesn't fit the criteria for the contest. You have plenty of time to write a new one and submit to this contest. One that will follow the rules.
Welcome to the site Ani7
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I agree a beautiful piece however I would urge you to write something that fits in with the rules of the contest.
Take care
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It is a great poem, it has 3 spelling errors in it I do hope you write another for the contest
Lakota x -
lovely poem...no,,more than lovely..it is beautiful..but it doesn't fit the criteria for the contest ...hugs..leanne xx
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Actually, I admit, I often start off writing a poem and then my thoughts simply drift away. Lost love and shattered dreams, life can be pretty cruel at times.
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your imagery is dainty in a dreamy yet critcal way, it's like words unwinding from your spine. i can apreciate having high expectations for yourself, then getting lazy about the concept of 'the dream' -or board with it-. "who shall care for a yellowed leaf", beautiful line, your point is clearly made.
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This is a beautiful poem, full of wonderful, yet sad images. The flow is wonderful and it read like a dream. But, I'm not sure how it fits with the contest criteria. There is plenty of time to submit another entry, one that fits with the "Look at the ship...picture youself there..." criteria of the contest.
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