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there you go

There goes my dream
Walking down the street
With someone new
There goes my dream
Oh how I love him so
He will never know
What he means to me


I was dreaming of happiness
and life of togetherness
No more of this loneliness
A love without an end

But there goes my dream
Walking down the street
With somebody new
There goes my dream
Oh how I love him so
He will never know
What he means to me


I was dreaming of a home
Of him growing old with me
Sharing memories
Of a wonderful life

But there goes my dream
Walking down the street
With somebody new
There goes my dream
oh how I love him so
He will never know

There goes my dream

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Written March 12th, 2004

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  • josh-13
    March 11, 2005
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    Wow, that is an awesome poem. I can relate to it with this one girl,I dont like love poems but this one is sad and touching. So you have my sympithy. Damn good write, I realy enjoyed it. josh


  • emochild
    June 18, 2004
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    !!!

    bah why haven't I taked the time to comment on your poem?

    >idiot<

    my favorite stanza:
    I was dreaming of happiness
    and life of togetherness
    No more of this loneliness
    A love without an end

    man you're a genius. I would never have rhymed "togetherness/loneliness."
    See what I mean?
    pure genius.
    anyway start posting more stuff.
    school's over so I actually have time to read now haha.. but it shouldn't have been an excuse in the first place =/
    <33333333
    -Jen

  • DixieChick
    April 6, 2004
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    Nah I wasn't trying to rhyme. Thank you for all of you comments! I'm trying to write something more for caught up in desire if you would want to collaborate

  • MandiPanda21
    April 6, 2004
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    Awwww that's such a sweet yet sad poem. I really enjoyed it.

    But there goes my dream
    Walking down the street
    With somebody new
    There goes my dream
    oh how I love him so
    He will never know

    I know how that is. I really liked my best friend, but he loved someone else. After picturing how great it would be if we got together, he found someone else. Watching him with her on Valentine's Day was the worst feeling in my life. But enough about me lol. I liked how you wrote the poem. Were you trying to rhyme throughout the whole poem though? A few parts didn't rhyme so I'm curious. Other than that I enjoyed it.
    ~Mandi~