Yes, I know that this addiction is sick
The pain is brutal, and also quick
The blade my conqueror my true best friend
the more I am pressured the more I cut in
The only preservation comes from the pain
feeling the refuge dug deep in my veins
It always helps to know that I can feel
and the best part is when I know that I can heal
with each lash i make it seems to stain
with scars of a loosing battle that seem to remain
I do it to make sure that I can still bleed
each time I cut in it feeds the need
the need to feel the painful high I crave
the rush I get from the shinny silver blade
A contest entry
- ♥ To Self Harmers ♥ by DinkyDiver.
1800 points, ended May 28, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A candle in the dark by im dead - go away.
425 points, ended June 16, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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all my marks are the same as dinky diver, so i give you 36. thanks for entering an honest piece x
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first impression; a lovely layout to the poem with an appropriate background
itle (how well the title relates to the poem): 10/10
Emotion (Shows emotion and gives a feeling to the poem): 4/10
Flow/Structure (It's easy to read and looks good): 6/10
Imagery (Paints a vivid picture in ones mind): 4/10
Reaction (How did the poem make me feel?) 6/10
Overall (overall opinion of the poem): 6/10
Totaling: 36/60
this is a great write with a nice steady flow to it and with such honesty, welldone and thankyou for entering my contest x
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I used to self mutilate, I have a few pretty nasty scars from it. Most have faded now, though. I did it way before it was cool, back in like 94 is when I started. Always out of sight where no one can see. If you are an active cutter, we should talk...
I hate to hear anyone locked into that cycle.
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You captured the addiction of self-harm very well, while also using nice imagery. Your rythm is a bit off in places. However, on a whole it was an interesting read. Dark and sombre and beautiful - well done!
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