I have a friend
He is silver and Gray
he lays in my bedroom all day
i come home
pissed off at the world
he is there
waiting til i take him to my wrist again
let me tell you about my dear friend
you see he is a bit unusual
some would even say a bit scary
but i am not a bit afraid
he lives under my mattress
and loves the color red
his favorite shape is lines
but lines that cant be erased or taken away
he can sit there and make lines all day
his teeth are sharp
his voice so smooth
the relief i feel
i feel as good as new
the tears they come
as i fall asleep
i think
tomorrow i will feel
the same damned thing
A contest entry
- The Cutters And The Suicidal by Juggalette Sammy.
1000 points, ended May 22, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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i love your personification...i think its personification..lol...but its and amazing poem...
let me tell you about my dear friend
you see he is a bit unusual
some would even say a bit scary
but i am not a bit afraid
he lives under my mattress
and loves the color red
that was my favorite part...i love how you made your razor blade your friend...
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but lines that cant be erased or taken away
he can sit there and make lines all day
his teeth are sharp
his voice so smooth
totally my fav part -
Wow, you did so well at writing this. Great take on the prompt and I'm glad you took time to write it. I like how you used the razor metaphor as your friend.
Good job! And good luck in the contest!
Thanks for entering! -
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