We met that night at the bar
I remember thinking how manly you are
As we talked, I'd smile and you'd wink
Your wallet was thick as you paid for my drink
Before long we were on the dance floor
There was an attraction about you I could not ignore
You knew all the right words to say
Like "I love your hair done up that way"
As we danced I said "Please understand, I don't do one night stands"
You smiled and said "Neither do I, I'm not that kind of man"
Then you offered to drop me off at home
You looked so honest, but I should have known
You opened my door with your strong arm
How long did it take to practice that charm?
Because as soon as you got into the car
You weren't the same man I met in the bar
We sped off into the dark
And came to stop alone in a park
"Thish ish where I come to think"
I knew you'd had too much to drink
I remember being thrown onto the cars hood
You choking me, but I wouldn't have screamed if I could
Off came my blouse and bra, exposing my breasts
You said "Those are nice, but I havent seen the best of you yet"
I closed my eyes, pretending I was elsewhere
Making sure I wouldn't remember exactly what happened there
The next thing I recall I was being dropped off at home
Then stumlbling up to my room to be all alone
I would not allow myself to cry
Because I knew one day you'd die
Alone in a bed wondering "Why me, Why me?
What did I do to deserve HIV?"
The answer is summed up in these words few
"You raped me, so I killed you"
Initially you were the hunter, and I was the prey
But it didnt ultimately end up that way
I had AIDS, but you I didnt tell
Which means it is I that sentenced you to hell
You wont be alone, so do not despair
Because as pennance for my sin, I'll see you there
Thanks to you my heart is ice
But at least I have my poetic injustice
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A powerful piece indeed. wow.
Good luck in the contest you entered..It was deep..if this doesnt place they have issues
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That was quite a twist. It jerks your heart a little to read it, but in some twisted way it gives a very powerfull message.
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Fucking powerful. I must favorite this.
There's no more to say, this poem is amazing.
There's some small things about word choice or structure that could be altered, but I think I like it just the way it is.
Very nice.
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Very powerful, and a terrible story to share, under the assumption that it's your experience. (Not saying you're a liar, of course, it's just sometimes we tell the stories of people too scared to tell them themselves)
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a sad story indeed.
thanks.
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