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A Feather For Her Cap (Prose)

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    Steaming sensuality oozed from every pour of her hypothermic body
As she hovered just above the hot tar roof, she could hear it bubbling.
She had that affect on every one and thing she came in contact with.

    Black Lilly carefully braided garlands of deadly night shade in her hair as she impatiently waited for the witching hour when the bars let out. Ah, the sweet smell of death's temptress, stalking her human prey.
No man had ever rejected her advances, though it meant certain death
of this she could always count on, for her demonic beauty was her curse.

    Boredom plagued her every waking moment in the eternity of her night but this night was seductively special with a feather for her cap to be won. It was ten minutes till closing time, for the gay bar she had in her sights. The demonic erotic energy had her mound dripping and her nipples hard in anticipation of the intoxicating perfume of fear coming from her prey. Saliva sparkled as moon light caught its slow progression to pointed fangs. Hunger was driving her crazy, for this would be her sweetest conquest yet. He would taste the forbidden fruit of her steaming cold loins and despair. She would have the unattainable affections of an un-seducible gay man. A seduction of penetration, her fangs compelling him to penetrate her.

    An October harvest Moon as big as the hunger in her loins glowed orange. The translucent petals woven in her hair captured the moons reflected glow. The clock tower struck two as the gay bar poured out into a desire filled street. But still she waited for the strapping bouncer who would be locking the door. The clock tower struck three, the door opened, then shut with the bouncer locking it behind him for the night.
Alone and sober he headed north on south-street. From roof top to roof top she followed close behind until the buildings ended and the park began.

 

    Spreading her wings she stepped off the roof and was lifted by a warm summer thermal. A shadow crossed over the moon glow, lighting the way home to his lover. Just then a chill ran up his spine and he quickened his pace.

   

    In a clearing by the tree line, at the far end of the park, she slowly pirouetted onto the path before him. Tucking her wings up under her black chiffon dress, her silhouette, moon bathed was stunning even to him. She stood there watching his approach. Her pheromones preceded her. With the first scent he inhaled, his eyes met hers, entranced by her spellbound gaze. He swooned into Black Lilly’s arms. Sweet Timmy Truelove was about to be turned, in more way's than one!


Author notes

Phrase Prompt: # 3. She's a winged bitch of the night

                                    with a penchant for the moon.

 

 

Vampires, Romance and Adventure ...

the Cullins Way.


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  • aslanlight
    November 23
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    Stunning and brilliant!

    Wow, now this is a side of you I haven't seen! Your story telling is absolutely compelling and I drank in every line while waiting for the next.

    Thanks for scripting the power of woman!

    Peace Georgia

    P.S You raise an interesting point: how can gay men resist the power of a woman's pheromones? After all it's chemistry isn't it.

  • I think it is unfortunate that in a prose piece there should be a couple of uncorrected errors of English (typos?) in the first few lines. Surely pour should read pore and I think that every one should read everyone.

    • aslanlight
      November 23
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      I consider your comment to this poet to be extremely rude! Surely when giving a criticism some encouragement and good points ought to be highlighted also? (Otherwise you'll just be seen as a grumpy git)

  • My, my what a diffrence
    A good story, although bits and pieces did tread the line of cliche.

    Still wonderful nonetheless.
    Amazing job
    Favorite lines
    "She would have the unattainable affections of an un-seducible gay man. A seduction of penetration, her fangs compelling him to penetrate her."

    ~Serenity

  • Oh, poor Timmy Truelove! I like it. Not exactly what I was looking for, but nonetheless, I like it. Seductive, mysterious... yum.

  • i loved were you took this poem and how your words took it to that place without being overly blunt. thanks for entering


  • Heroesrox
    May 14

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    "deaths temptress, stalking" death's is what this should say.

    Other than that, I liked this. It seemed to be more of a short story than a poem, though. Awesome work. All the best to you. Thanks so much for entering.

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