You have no feelings or desires
Your eye's lie in distant fires
Haunt me as you do-
Flaunt your tumultuous hate upon my soul
For what lie's in side there is no glow
This you must know
You have extinguished it a long time ago!
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What did you think
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what form is this??????????????
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short but STRONG!
i loved the rhyme, it added to the meaning and had me leeching on each word !
Beautiful!
Thankyou for enterting my contest and well done on a great write!
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I love the rhyme here.
thanks so much for sharing. -
Clever
Words choices so clever,you said so much,yet so little.10/10,this is a clever poem. -
So few words, so much said. This was a very deep expresive poem. It called to me and made my heart sing. Thank you for this amazing entry!
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Before I get onto the good stuff: "eye's" doesn't need the apostrophe. (sorry, that really annoys me, need to get it out of the way early! Hope you don't mind!)
I love this piece. I think it's clever and I can really empathise with the poem. I really, really enjoyed it. Thank you for entering it. Would you mind putting the word count into the author notes, it was in the rules
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Very deep for such a short write. Sometimes those are the best kind though.
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This is short and to-the-point. Nice.
Thank you so much for your entry and all the best to you!
♥ Char
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^_^ I like this
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