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devastation!

darkness all around me,

now im feeling sorry,

shocked into a state in which,

you're dancing with misery,

 

how could this be happening,

the claws of sorrow snapping,

they take you: your the victom,

this only adds up to just one sum. . .

 

THIS IS WHAT DVASTATION, IT DOES TO YOU:

it'll spit you out,

you can see right through,

this devastaion day will do to youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu. 

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  • XxDeathlyLovexX
    September 8
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    i like it... it's has some really interesting lines

  • cheeners
    June 9

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    amazing, this brought a sense of imagery to my mind that not many poems have been able to do. Keep up the good work! I look forward to more.


  • Young Confusions
    May 15

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    Wow interesting stuff, "the clawsof sorrow snapping"...fantastic image. Thanks for sharing