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You Left A Footprint On My Heart

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The forestry of loves sentiments
Wilting and shriveling away incessantly
Not being able to bear the overwhelming wretchedness
Unascertained of what lies ahead



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Having qualms of where I stand
While my dejected heart dangles
At the end of the rainbow
That is now dwindling away



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Facing reality that the passion
He once had is now dead
Piercing my soul until mutilated
Leaving a footprint on my heart

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 





 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Nothing personal for contest only

The picture used with this write I do not claim as my own. Picture found on windows live images.


Title Prompt: You Left A Footprint On My heart

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Comments

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    May 29

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    This is a very unique piece. It would’ve made it to the finalists if it had punctuation and every line didn’t start with caps Thanks for writing for me and for entering my contest. I’m honored to have you show your work here!


  • Desire gold member
    May 28

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    Wow~

    Emotion packed piece You have penned here Beautiful and Love how You took the prompt to a whole new level~ Excellent~
    The picture Gorgeous...Just speaks volumes also swells the eyes Your words do~

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • moluv10
    May 25

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    a very deep and sad write. you did an excellent job writing this. i love the background and the structure. Good luck in the contest.


  • Indecisive Speckle
    May 25

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    wow such a heartbreaking piece. so beautifully written. its is so sad yet so wonderfully worded. bravo!

  • mz.butter
    May 24

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    lost love can weigh heavy on your heart,actually feeling like someone is standing right on your heart,but the most important thing to do is think about all the good things about that other person and what made your relationship special in the first place,and consider all the bad things as a lesson learned,so hopefully before you find yourself in the same situation ,you'll use that experience to prevent the same mistakes,and hopefully talking about your future relationships can always make you smile.


  • mcope8050
    May 24

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    that's deep

    i read this a couple of times and realized truly how deep this was,,, nicely done,,, the layout really added to it's effectiveness,,, powerfully written,,, thanks for sharing


  • Gods child40 silver member
    May 23

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    very nice loved it! Facing reality that the passion
    He once had is now dead
    Piercing my soul until mutilated
    Leaving a footprint on my heart


  • melmo
    May 18
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    omg

    wow sucha a sad and dark beautiful peom...it makes my soul weep...great job such wonderful writing


  • Glasyalabolas
    May 17

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    Strong and sorrowful, yet doesn't overwhelm the reader with the emotions, keeps focussed and doesn't lose itself in the thoughts and feelings, all down to the words chosen.

    Good write.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 17

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    deep

    and very touching..loved the way you set this up, and the background works perfectly for it..it's not a happy joyful write but it certainly brings me joy to read such a powerful piece..


  • darell
    May 13
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    Baby..

    go a head and write the darn thing.
    I can't wait. the suspense is killing me.

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