I've fallen in love and I've fallen heavily.
I've been watching the bomb for a long time
and I'm utterly infatuated.
Last night, at a party, I danced with the bomb.
We did the tango and we danced beautifully
as we talked about philosophy and fear
and how much we hated our jobs.
I cuddled the bomb and the bomb responded
and we decided to go home together on my bicycle.
The bomb sat on the back
and we rode through the streets singing:
I could have danced all night...
We lay on the couch drinking scotch on the rocks
and the bomb leaned over to kiss me
and we embraced and the bomb kissed my neck
saying: Quick, quick, press the button,
press the button, press the button.
And we had a world-shattering experience
as we exploded with passion.
Afterwards, we lay all over the floor, smoking,
and the bomb confessed to being married
but by then it was too late - I didn't care.
I want to elope with the bomb.
I know the bomb gets depressed
and I want to take the bomb on a holiday
away to Bali, to get away from it all.
The bomb needs a break
and i think I can make the bomb happy.
But this morning I woke in an empty bed.
The bomb had pinned a note to my pillow:
thanks for a wonderful night
sorry to love you and leave you
I will always be with you
with love
The Bomb
A contest entry
- Symbolism as a Medium by Hannah Sophia.
750 points, ended May 26, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Love the Bomb
Crafted perfectly for relationship. Dreaming -
Wow, I adore the symbolism. The ending of the poem is striking and unexpected. While the poem is vague in some aspects, it is also raw and exposed.
The line "I was always be with you" should either read "I was always with you" or "I will always be with you". The line as it stands in grammatically incorrect. Other than that, I see no problem with your poem. It is poignantly bitter. Great job and keep writing! -
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typo
Thank you very much for picking up the typo. I've fixed it up now.
I enjoyed reading your response to my double-edged poem about our relaxed attitudes to the threat of nuclear war and also, the damage that can be caused by a one-night stand.
Cheers,
myron.
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I love the idea here. Very strong poem. Very meaningful, and I'm sure many here can relate amazingly [not me personally though]. Fuckin' amazing job yet again. Keep it up. I love reading your poems, every single time.
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This is so entertaining and funny. It is unusual and it takes a creative mind to come up with subject matter like this.
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I loved this. It flows very well and I love the symbolism. The imagery is great; very descriptive. Great write.
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very good symbolism here. you wrote this well and have earned my applause. thank you for sharing this with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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Great
I love the write. Full of imagery and art. The humor and the emotion go well together. I love reading your work. Thank you for sharing
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aw a wonderful write so full of depth and feeling throughout good luck in the contest
maralisa
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oh my oh my oh my
still giggling, this has to be an A-bomb no? a rollicking write, I smiled all the way through it. agreat read
Annie
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A-bomb
LOL! Thanks for reading! -
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hmm
the reference to the A bomb dates us a bit grin
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