Fighting to let go of the events
That always keep me bottled from you
Worried so sick trying to prevent
Heartbreaks rising from their numbers few
I beg my conscious to let me free
Just enough to give you my full trust
Though scared of the possibilities
Thinking to you this may just be lust
But your gentle voice and words so kind
Let me know you must love me for me
To doubt I must be out of my mind
Still I need more time to fully see
In mean time, you I stupidly judge
I never mean to be abrasive
It's me telling you I need a nudge
My mind trying to be evasive
What did you think
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Great Write
I think that it is really true how your mind sometimes knows something might not be good for you but your heart aches for it. I like how you show it. You almost make your conscious a person, because you are begging it to be free. Not to mention how true it is that we can be prisoners of our conscious.
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There are times that the heart and mind tend to disagree when emotions are involved. The thing to remember that sometimes they both work in unison to let love shine in a moment of time. That's when you have to react. Very well done.
Ted E
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good stuff
I love that last line...
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Another lovely poem ^.^
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There is, by the end a term applied as caring, and all you write here rubber stamps an authority on that issue. Far too late?I still don't see where the title comes into it, I'd more and likely title it, "Let Me Ascertain. " A brief stare at your observations and thoughts, lovely wise head you have.
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Wow. Just...Wow.
And...WOW!
That was fantastic! The flow, the grammar...I love it! -
WOAH
go ashley, go ashley, go ashley
YOU ROCK GIRL
THIS IS THE BEST POEM OF ALLLLLLLLLLLL TIME
I LOVE UR RHYMES
(dont talk to me coz im jealous)
i really loved it
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