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i couldn't cry

i couldn't cry...wouldn't cry

i couldn't look; watch as they carried a box holding a body no longer yours
i couldn't sing; songs to celebrate a life long gone

i couldn't cry...wouldn't cry. i was too strong
...or was it too weak to show how bad it hurt?

i couldn't go; sit by a bed as you died piece by piece
i couldn't watch; see you disappear and forget who i was

i couldn't cry...wouldn't cry. i was too strong
...or was it too weak to show how bad it hurt?

i couldn't say; so many things left to tell that never saw light
i couldn't do; hold a hand that'd held mine so many times before

i couldn't cry...wouldn't cry. i was too strong
or was it too weak to show how bad it hurt?

...

i should've done; all the things i wanted while i could
i wish i'd done; more than i did

and now i can't stop crying, i won't stop crying. i'm not strong at all
...but i still can't show how bad it still hurts

Author notes

This was REALLY hard to write - but I think I needed to.

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  • trekkergirl
    May 17

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    Yes, I can see that it was very hard to write. But you really wrote it very well. I can feel a lot of emotions in this one. G reat job. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


    • Jane Doe Lives
      May 17
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      Thanks, that means a lot. I was a little worried that due to how much it means to me as a topic, I wouldn't be able to do it justice in words.

      Thanks again,