Star Light, Star Bright
First star I see tonight
I wish I may I wish I might
Die tonight in a bloody sight
Amber my love to you I wirte
To you I'll say my last goodnight
I wish is to now make things right
As I face my final fight
As I look into the midnight sky
I can only think bout your beautiful eyes
And I pray they never have to cry
As I go to hell and begin to fry
I have decided on my last request
Take what is yours the heart in my chest
The good in my life you are the best
So sleep well knowing my soul is at rest
Star Light, Star Bright
First star I see tonight
I wish I may I wish I might
Die tonight and make things right
A contest entry
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450 points, ended May 17, 71 entries
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You are not on my favorites or friends list. So I am removing you for the contest.
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Wow...um different, refering to the hell and frying part, lol but good. Thanks for entering, good write
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Awww cute!
I loved this poem! The picture was a nice touch. It gave me chills as i read this. My favorite part is:
'As I look into the midnight sky;
I can only think bout your beautiful eyes;
And I pray they never have to cry;
As I go to hell and begin to fry;'
You're really good. Keep writing and welcome to allpoetry!
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Thank you
Thank you but it is nothing special it is just me in a poem I would love to write some more
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is a great poem, I really like the way you have expressed this, I love the take on the old nursery rhyme
I just wanted to welcome you to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!
Polly
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Ahhh I loved this one. This is the kind of dark poems I like.
Imagery/20
Style/35
background/30
Prompt used/40
Prewrite/0
fresh write/50
Points: 170
Fave part:
I have decided on my last request;
Take what is yours the heart in my chest;
The good in my life you are the best;
So sleep well knowing my soul is at rest;
Thanks for entring and good luck -
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Thank you
Thank you but it is nothing special it is just me in a poem I would love to write some more
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