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Brandan

Curls of brown hair
Lick at his ears
Silver frames his
stunning blue eyes.
As his tall, thin figure sits
Skillfully painting a
Beautiful inner-self portrait

Runes symbolizing
his character
Contour the border-

The canvas is filled
With Celtic beauty
And Christian influences
Ablaze with the flames
of a majestic dragon.

He paints The sky,
A  remarkable sunrise fanfare
Filled with wondrous cumulus clouds
Each stroke of his brush representing
His dreams and all he aspires to be

And in the very center of the canvas
A magnificent tree is rooted
Fostering wisdom and strength.
A small heart is carved in the bark
professing his everlasting love for me.

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  • XxNinjaNemoxX
    September 17

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    Wow. I love the last stanza a whole lot. Amazing.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck
    xoxo.

  • Ah, love.. It is beatiful. Favourite stanza was,
    And in the very center of the canvas
    A magnificent tree is rooted
    Fostering wisdom and strength.
    A small heart is carved in the bark
    professing his everlasting love for me.

    I really understood what his universe was, i mean he has all these beliefs and things, and then he places you in the center. Very well written.
    Rose

  • WOW WOW WOW thats really all I can say This is amazing nonetheless, great work on this