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Beauty

Such a normal place i see
willows swaying
bees humming
wolves baying

slowly my eyes close
of their own will
as if to tell me
I'm missing something

Color bursts behind my eyes
imagination rushes in
i see such wonders
All from within

I hear rushing waters
I see trees galore
I smell flowers blooming
All fabricated from divine

Here I lay in the soft grass
nothing more amazing than that of my mind
and i never want to open my eyes
I fear what i may find.

Author notes

the landscape is more then the natural world and is more then what we can see with our own eyes

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  • Simply Kristen
    May 13

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    awesome job, i loved how u made the world in ur mind, so much greater than the real world. i loved it


  • luna-midnight gold member
    May 12
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    wow, i really like this, it really takes the reader somewhere. wonderful write!!!


  • Mirrored.in.faith
    May 12

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    Quote 1)

    ...the landscape is more then the natural world and is more then what we can see with our own eyes...

    2)
    ...often cross these socially constructed boundaries...

    12/5