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Havana flamenco

Havana flamenco
The blonde demands attention
But the raven erupts intensity
Scalpel the skin from my back for your tambourine
I shine with your rum

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  • Nicolette gold member
    May 16

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    this poem does indeed carry within it a certain dark intensity... loved the mood you've created here and the way you've made the contest prompt your own - well done! thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • vieve gold member
    May 12

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    Excellent take on the contest theme. A bright, dark burst of passion, slowed by the rum a bit, slightly warped and perverse in the best way. Love this.