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Bad Girl! Bad, Bad Girl!

Slap-dash against the rocks, laying she--
Her tits! ...

...All of them! --Bright as the blown-out eyes of stroke victims.

But it’s freezing! it’s morning! -M-m--Monday!

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  • luckhole
    August 21
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    been there


  • Errant Panther gold member
    May 15

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    Not sure I see the point you're making here, certainly though this is a very creative piece you have shared.