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In and out

In and out
      much time
In  and    out
          At last
          at first
          a birth
breath
          Happy and sad
then
      death

A spring of seasons,
                                fall of life.
    And in the window dressing,
  Sits the price.
Come in,
            Come in.
come end.
        Begin.

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