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The Neighbor

Moon peeks through a tear
in night's heavy, velvet blanket
nailed in haste over daylight's window.

Morning undresses again,
unaware.








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  • just mercedes gold member
    June 25
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    Great poetic dvices here, stunning in its brevity. Congratulations on the trophy!


  • ajocean silver member
    June 4
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    great piece thanks a million for sharing


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 1

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    Wonderful visuals in this poem and what lovely personification. I really liked this - wonderful poetry!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Daizee silver member
    June 1
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    I read this and smiled.


  • blueyez
    May 31

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    I love your use of metaphors here... makes the write very lovely!


  • lunarlunacy
    May 31
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    sharp closing to this. well done and congrats.


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 22

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    ooh, i like this!

    congrats on the silver, my friend

     

    love, lane


  • thepoetssoul
    May 22

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    Incredible...
    Your talent is above and beyond, I'm very jealous.
    Be blessed in all you ever do.

    Tony


  • CrystalLizard
    May 20

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    Beautiful—I love the imagery that you've packed into such a short piece. I might never look at the moon peeping through my curtains in the same way again. Congrats on the silver!


  • Tqop
    May 14

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    Amazing Work:

    This is very beautiful. I love the way you described the moon. I love the imagery. Great job. Thanks for sharing.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    May 13
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    well, this nails it

    Perfect images and one of those tight-fitting metaphors.
    Luvit.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 12

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    amazing..

    the opening line is strong and magnetizing where you have no choice but to get swept up in the fantastic imagery and awed by the sheer simplicity
    of this very deep piece..loved it..


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 12

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    Oh wow, what amazing imagery in your words. An amazing piece. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy
    Gaylene


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    May 11

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    This was magical...the imagery so vivid and unique. I loved the idea of the moon peeking in at the unsuspecting morning. Congratulations on the silver trophy. Peace and hugs, Liz


  • badnovocaine
    May 11

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    ooo loved this, congrats on the silver. Oh and I have to tell you how much I adored the ending!!! Was really creative.


  • Cannonsfire
    May 11

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    Hmm my comment disappeared! Was saying my Bug that you capture a scene in brevity that leaves it for the reader to ponder over long after the reading is finished. Loved this C


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    May 11

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    Thank you for your entry

    Beautiful imagery in this here and I really see the connection to the prompt.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • Canadamomma
    May 11

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    this is amazing, I really loved the take here
    best of luck to you in the contest

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