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Chosen

Have you been chosen
To ruin my world?
To crush my hopes
And smother my dreams?

You have betrayed me
In more ways then one.
Ignoring the hurt you brought
You make me cold inside.

I marked myself as yours
And you took that for granted.
Not knowing what side to choose
Always placing me in second.

My hatred is untamed
No string on this kite.
Seams ripping apart
Questioning what I am here for.

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 11

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    Very matter-of-fact questions here that need answers. Nice write

    ♥
    whisper


  • WordsAndWits
    August 21

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    Good! I hate it when people take things you give them for granted, or use them in a way you did not intend. This is nice and I wish you all the luvk in the world,
    - Caroline


  • black-phenoqu
    July 14

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    this is nice.

    not wonderful or fraught with emotion, but nice. i like the statement behind this "what am i here for?"


  • Jamzine
    June 24
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    thx fior entering


  • Lively Matter
    June 23

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    oooo, tis a wonderfuly worded poem! Such emotion in your words, and greatly written! Tis sad though, how relationships can end and begin all in the same breath. Thanks for entering, enjoyed this piece.

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 18

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    wow! this was really good! i could feel the emotions in this. it was really good; the stanzas make this poem more powerful as I continue reading it. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • The cliche typo
    June 15
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    ciool

    i can relate =)


  • OnlyOneLifeToLive
    May 21
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    I am going to assume that your old poem was Too Little Too Late since it is right before this on the list. Let me know if I am wrong. I did ask to put the two titles you entered in your authors comments. I think that just the stanzas makes this poem look better and easier to read. It flows well. Noticeable improvement. Great job and good luck


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    May 15
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    Hmmm. The emotion is tangible in this piece and painful to pick apart. But there's not much in the way of imagery. I'm also curious as to why you chose the background & font combination.

    However, I can certainly commiserate with the strength of the poem. I have been there and truth be told, will probably be there again.

    Thank you for your entry in my contest and good luck!

    - BeanSidhe

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