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When the razor starts to sink in
Everything that I was just thinkin
Starts to flow right out of me
So when you see me just let me be
Here all alone with my blade
As I slowly begin to fade
So when I pick up a knife
To take my own life
Forgive me for my sin
As I cut deep into my skin
And slowly fade away
not to see another day
Just one more thing left to say
As I slowly pass away
I do not have to hear another lie
As I lay here and slowly die
I am free from hell
So goodbye and fair well
And when I become all cold and pail
Just maybe You will start sending me mail
Author notes
!?! is the third poem that I wrote no the same night as One Love and Tattoo Nightmares! I do not remember writing this poem at all, but the inspiration came from family and close friends that I know that cut and think of suicide! I do carry a razor blade with me at all times and play with it all the time, but it is only a tattoo on my wrist in memory of the lives that I saved over the years! On that note, I wrote this poem though their eyes.. I believe!
~Grasshopper
A contest entry
- ♥ To Self Harmers ♥ by DinkyDiver.
1800 points, ended May 28, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My Power, My Pleasure, My Pain by Ken-Maverick.
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JUDGED!
Very interesting indeed, nicely penned poet.
All the best to you in the contest and thanks for entering.
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first impression; interesting
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Emotion (Shows emotion and gives a feeling to the poem): 7/10
Flow/Structure (It's easy to read and looks good): 7/10
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Totaling: 32/60
thank you for sharing this poem along with your authors notes, this was a well penned write x
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Flow/Structure (It's easy to read and looks good): 6/10
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Totaling: 31/60
This is a very good write and I can feel/relate to your pain well, thankyou for sharing this with me
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man a live that is really deep
i knw edzactaly how you feel that is the same thing i go through every single day and that is the way my life has been and seems lyk it won't go away
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AHHHHHHHH DATS COOL
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Thanks
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hey
are you online now
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this is sadly relatable
it screams of loniness
and despair.
Best wishes
and thank you for sharing
~Pastel
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Your so very welcome!
Thanks for the comment!
It means a lot too me!
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Ah baby, this is really good! Its so sad though, I don't want you to be sad. :'( I still love you!
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