You never had to push and shove
To get to my love
Because from the start
I gave you my heart
Until the day that I die
And that is no lie!
Sorry its not whole
For I was a fool
And over the years
There were many tears
And it got scattered
Not to mention shattered
From one person too another
Until it could go no further.
I am still picking up all the pieces
From all the different places
Trying to get it all back together
So it can be all yours forever
Because the only thing I want to do
Is be in love with you!
Author notes
One Love is the second poem that I wrote on the same drunk lonely night as Tattoo Nightmares! I was pretty smashed and I all of my past relationship started to emerge and haunt me! My heart started to race, and I realized that I still had much love for all of the woman that I was with in the past!.. I blacked out on that thought and do not even remember writing this poem! I was always a fun loving alcoholic though! On that note, My love is pure now and my heart is full.
~Grasshopper
A contest entry
- New Members/Members Without Trophies: by amaranthine lover.
675 points, ended May 14, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How far does love strech?
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Love never truly dies.
I enjoyed this very much
First write eh?
You're a natural!
Thanks for sharing
~Pastel
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very raw thanks for sharing
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I think you have a way of expressing feelings/thoughts in a modern realism that today's reader can comprehend and relate to. The sentiments to this, with a bit of sadness, overcome in that last stanza, leading to a hopeful thought and future. It's dedication of self, which is imperative before you can dedicate to another. If you are truly offering your heart, than she'd be a fool to give it up. Hope it all sticks together for you guys. Love the ending to this.
Storm
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Thanks
Smashing comment! All the love I am getting on these poems and all the inspiration for Chanel I might just pick up the pen and start writing again! I know when I wrote this poem I just flew right through it without even thinking! I was single at the time and just wanted to forget about all my past lovers and move on with my life and offer everything that I had to that special someone! Gee.. I think I am getting too soft these days.. lol
Anyway, thanks for the comment! It touched me in so many ways!
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This is a good piece. One of your first? Well done!
A small suggestion, just because I think it would sound better, try "further" instead of "farther" in the last line of your second stanza.
Your last stanza is my favorite part. Great lines and expression of your heart.
Keep writing on!
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Thanks
I committed it in the new comers contest and made the change to it that you suggested! Thanks for your insight! Wish me luck.. Please!
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More applause!
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Brandon I love this poem! Its so sweet!
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Yay!!
Thanks Chanel, I love feed back!
It is fucking amazing for one of my first poems!!
Maybe I should try my luck with another one!
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