21 pancakes

my thoughts were pilled
up against the door

like a
stack
of stale
pancakes

that my childhood
refused to eat

mum had folded
a rusty key
in the sweet batter
when I was too little
to know what it was for

but as Suns rotation
placed the twenty-first
soft slab
beneath the small
black shape

(I thought)
I heard the brass whisper

Author notes

Prompt: "We are each responsible for our own life - no other person is or even can be."

I'm approaching my 21st birthday so I combined the idea of being responsible for ones own life with having the key to life's door.

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Maili Knephthan
May 17

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Very thought provoking and believe me no one can be responsible for your life but you. I like this piece it says a lot and I really think you did a good job on the prompt.
Cannonsfire
May 15

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Amazing thought process and the title drew me in. Quirky but often that's how thoughts come out. C
NothingButShrooms
May 13

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i love this.
the twist is quisite, who would ahve thought pancakes could be thought provoking.
Maili Knephthan
May 11
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We are each responsible for our own life - no other person is or even can be.
Oprah Winfrey

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