Again with the alleyway...
Dark as light shines in the day...
Though on this night
I seem to be 'un'-alone,
In my minds eye I feel him
Peering at me from behind
I think I heard a footstep,
I think I saw that motion
Yes, there in that patch
Of shadowy darkness...
Was that a glint of silver?
Does he think that would
Stop me from a last defense?
Then I feel a tug at the head
Ripped outside what I thought
Was my safety, now far below...
A quick change of view
And I'm over in the cloak
Of night, ready with sneering,
Readying hate for attack.
I need some money
I need some release
So I'll take it out on you
And see what I can collect...
In an exchange of movements
The blood begins to pour,
From each side, A man does die...
And I felt it only once, then feel it all,
Death in my sanctity,
As I watch one wicked Fall...
Author notes
Have fun with this one ya'll...
A contest entry
- Your Nightmare Here by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended June 1, 43 entries
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Out of the Walls...
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going to comment every 2 stanzas any short ones I will combine with the one that follows it....
Stanza 1 and 2:
nothing scarier than being in a alley at night never go into them myself. Even in a small town like the one I live in now.
stanza 3 and 4:
hmm that last stanza kinda confused me great short catchy lines really is making for a great rthyme.
Stanza 5 and 6:
hmm wow how the tables have turned the victim is now the agressor and the aggressor well not the victim but definatly dead...
Conclusion:
hmmm I really liked this one I am going to add it to the finalist list thanks for entering I will add your reward..
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wow...
nice write
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Thank you.
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Nice
I was just wondering if you meant to do it that way on the last line, or if I should be A..
Other than that, this is really good. I liked it alot. Well written, good imagery. Support your muse, write on!
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Hahaha, yea, It was, good catch.
and Thanks a lot for your comment, I'm still slowly getting back into things again, but this time I've got plenty of new ideas.
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