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Barlow Rail

elijah stood over the railroad tracks
waiting for something to strike

it would come as a loud crack
the echo of bone smashing
into the infinite sound

his limbs spread freely
just a fraction of a moment
spanning all time and existence

he would scorn the trees
for cradling his last goodbye

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  • This is some good ish. Veeery illustrative, which is so creepy and sad in this case.

  • holy crap. why don't you write more. wtf.

    winter kane. write a book.

    • <333 i never have anything to write about... hahaha.
      write a book. bahhh. that would require having ideas, which i definitely do not.
      sometimes. haha

      thanks kerri :]